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viernes, 12 de abril de 2019

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  1. We'll never forget the party of our dogs, it was in april 1st.
    First we invited all the friends of our dogs, and they were very happy because they were having a party; after that, our dogs meet two little puppies and all the dogs were making friends, in the party were almost 10 puppies.
    Then all the dogs were eating a little muffins that we make especially for their, they were really happy.
    Finally all the puppies went to their houses and the party finished, we're so happy beacuse our dogs recieved a lot of presents and they enjoyed all the party.
    It was a great event beacuse all of the puppies enjoyed the party and were so happy.
    writed by: Laura Castellanos y Melissa Murillo

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    1. our dogs met
      some little muffins
      we made specially for them

      Great work, correct the verbs you missed to put in past
      Score: 4,5

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  2. I went with a friend and a big party of about 15 of a companion and we were having fun until it was time to waltz with the father and then danced with the rest of the guests.
    Approximately at nine o'clock at night,
    We ate pizza with some friends after the crazy hour I ended up at about 1 in the morning.
    Afterwards, our parents recognized each of my friends to go to their homes, for a week we talked about how incredible was the celebration of our companion Cristina.

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    1. how increbible the celebration was
      classmate instead of companion
      You missed to use the connectors and adverbs

      Score: 4,1

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  3. Luna Rincon and Mariana Chacon

    One day, like today we found in a party ,that was doing by Sara , in this party were much people, for that reason the first think that they doing were greet her because it was her birthday, the party was is Chia.

    After that I went to my friend's house and we had lunch, then we fix our face and put the dresses,we are so exiting because there was a famous singer. when we come there mariana started to dance and sing,while luna saw her embarrased because she was shothing so much.

    Finally after 5 hours luna and mariana decided to go out and came to our houses and sleep after a beautiful day.


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    1. We met at a Sara's party
      Many people
      the first thing they did was to greet her
      we were excited
      we came

      Good story
      Correct the mistakes
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  4. Names:Danna Camila Gomez Marin and Juan Pablo Peñaloza Alejo
    The topic is:A party
    The party was the 5 april 2019, the party was treated of a child's birthday.
    the parents talk of son, they gave him a welcome to a party, give a present and invite your frinds.
    They cuted the cake of chocolete and they gave them to their friends and to him.
    Wowwww!!! many people, on average fifty people telling me.
    i'm feel very funny and dangerous but the most people were tired of so much danced.

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    1. 5th April
      was about a chlid's birthday celebration
      talk to
      to the party
      gave, invited
      dangerous is not coherent there
      so much dancing
      Correct your mistakes: score: 3,7

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  5. I'll never forget last December,because this month my aunt decided make a party very very fantastic for her birthay number 21 in a country house very beautiful!!!!
    First my mother and father wanted make a party normally but my brother didn't want.my brother had a idea,this was maked a party very big and my fathers were accepted.After that my parents bought a big cake,I and my brother bought the decorartion.Then my cousins listened music for the party and bought food delicious and games.All were prepared and when went my aunt was very excited and happy.In the party all people were happy and were has funny.Finally the party
    finished at one o'clock am.
    In conclusion my aunt was very happy and spoke with her friends about the party and her friends made a great impact.that party we'll never forget because was fantastic.

    ALEJANDRO NARANJO,DANIEL SANABRIA





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    1. decided to make
      wanted to make
      an idea
      listened to music
      delicious food
      were funny
      spoke to her friends
      that party will never be forgot...
      Good job you had siple mistakes, correct them
      Score:4,5

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  6. Names:Natalia Cardenas and Mariana Fonseca

    we'll never forget the wedding that was as i imagine, this beautiful celebration happened on December 7, 2018. this wedding started with
    marriage proposal from France.Several months they thought all the preparations and everything was perfect.First was the Eucharist , after that was the arrival to the receipt and had cakes, buffet , dances , but is essential was the happiness of all guest.Just went the family of his ,my family and some friends.Today i tell as the celebration more beautiful that to me in the life , thank God.
    :)

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    1. I
      But the essential was the happiness
      only the groom's family were there
      In my opinion,it was the most beautiful celebration
      Correct your mistakes.
      Score:4,0

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  7. -Nelson Gordilo
    -juan esteban hernandez
    -Juan David Caro

    Party:
    I´ll never forget the birthday numer 15 for my favourit cousin, is carried to end piece in the home, plasolet, salon is prepare with weeks ahead of time, for we had a maravillous eventof the 15's of my cousin

    First this events started when the guest arrived to the event, when the Dj started to giving songs I danced with my cousin the balls. After that everybody danced and we ate, we take a rest and we talked about the family. Then we eated the desserts as strawberris with chocolate, this is really delicious. Finally we let went for our homes and we emited.

    It was a great evening because it was very fun and shared with the family, laugh and enjoyed.

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    1. Favourite cousin
      Some parts are not clear
      Marvelous
      play music
      we took
      ate not eated
      we went home
      You have some mistakes, correct them please
      Score:4'0

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  8. LUISA SIERRA AND MARIA ALEJANDRA RAMIREZ

    We'll never forget the party the last year, because was very funny and distract
    The party was the last year in the friend's house,first we ate hamburgers and we talked for a while, after that we danced and sang,then we take photos for the memory and finally we didn't play but we follow danced for a long time
    There were a lot of people in the party, more than 45 people, all of us friends,we had a great time :)
    we were a great evening with my friends

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    1. took photos
      kept dancing
      for a long tiime
      we had a great time
      You forgot to use the connectors
      Score: 4,0

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  9. MY SORPRISE PARTY
    I'll never forget last September. That is when my family organizeda big party for my birthday. There was a fantatic party. Firts , my parents bougth the food and drinks after my grandmather was invited old family. The party was a surpise for me. There were 32 people. To finaly the party my family went to your houses very contents.


    Alana Prieto and Natalia Vanegas :)

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    1. orginized a big party
      first
      old family in there is not neccessary
      Finally,
      to their houses delighted
      Not many mistakes but the instruction was to use the model and you did'nt use it
      Score: 3,7

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  10. karen miranda and kelly hernandez

    the wedding of miley cyrus and liam hemsworth
    Miley Cyrus and Liam Hemsworth met during the filming of The "Last Song", after 10 years the comings The couple have confirmed the rumors of this wedding through their social networks with romantic images their event was the day twenty three of december

    theirs friends they waited five days with theirs family for doing publicly congratulations on social networks ,at his wedding were
    many known singers and many more friends, they finally lost a house because of a fire and rumors say they broke up.

    in our opination The photos that they published they were beautiful because they express the true love they felt and they kept fighting for the love

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    1. They waited 5 days to make it pucblic
      December
      Their family
      In our opinion
      Score:4,0

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  11. ·María Paula Marín Martínez
    ·Nathalia Méndez Domínguez
    ·Juan Diego Suarez Garzón
    PARTY IN THE BEACH
    Hi...
    The friday 26 of july in the night we had a awesome party in the beach, because someone of our friends he turned 18 years old,
    It was at the 6:30pm past sevent and the people starting to arrive, later they are starting to have a conversation...

    The first, we drank beer "Corona" later we played volleyball, soccer frisbee too. After that we saw dolphins, fish as well as whales, there were thounsands of the people in this place, in additon we almost can't see the animals.Then, the animals are gone after of thirty minutes, later we danced a lot of time we think that it was three hours and finally we ate a lot of lechona and we dank much coca cola.

    The next day we talk about the party in the house of the birthday boy. We fell happy because it was something unforgettable, exciting and magnificent.
    End...
    Thank you for you attentation an for read.

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    1. 26th of July
      at night
      an awesome
      one of our friends turned 18
      It was at 6:30 pm
      started to arrive
      later they were

      thousands of people
      can't:couldn't
      the animals were
      drank
      talked
      felt
      for reading

      Correct your mistakes
      Take into account the past tense
      Score: 3,7

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  12. Name: Nicolas Cardenas Corredor
    My topic is: party
    The party was in the happy brithday of a friend the year past (2018) his parents organizes very well the party with his friens and family also have cake and food delisius. What we did firstwas that he played with a ball before everything started while that we play whit the ball a friend saw that throw food and call to his friends for that eat.
    finished we left for the houses after a big party and funny.
    many people, on average thirteen people.
    I felt very happy and fun after everything happened

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    1. The year past?
      Last year
      orginized
      had a cake
      delicious food
      while we played with
      call his friends to eat
      Finally,
      about 13 or 30 people?
      You forgot the simple past rules
      Score: 3,0

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  13. Name: Sara Aparicio - Sofia Muñoz.
    I'll never forget last March. That's when my older sister, my friend and I went to a party. First, I went shopping clothes and fix me. At seven o'clock, my friends started arrived at the party. At nine o'clock, started the dancing, ate ribs BBQ and we take coctel.
    After, my friends fell on top of each other, made my sister fall in the pool and that was so funny.
    There were about one hundred people and we all had a good time. I felt very happy. Finally, finished the party at the three o'clock.

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    1. started arriving to the party
      The dance started
      We ate ribs...
      We drank
      Correct your mistakes
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  14. Janel López and Alejandra Tinjacá

    THE PARTY OF MY BEST FRIENDS

    I'll never forget last April.That's when my best friend's boyfriend,decided to make a party to her, for his birthday.

    Firt,her boyfriend and I went shopping for drink and food. At eight o'clock her friends and family arrived for the party. At nine o'clock, her dad star by saying a few words and after that we cooked potatoes and burgers. finally at about four o'clock everyone went home.

    there were about twenty people and we all had a good time.Only our cat didn't enjoy the party. He stayed in the house. It was a great evening and i was really happy.
    thanks for you atention teacher :)




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    1. a party for her
      due to her birthday
      First
      arrived to the party
      God job
      score: 4,5

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  15. NEW YEAR: Paula Montenegro, Jorge Rojas

    I'll never forget last Dicember, because I met whit my family for receive the new year, in the my parents' house.

    First, my mum cooked the food At five o'clock, for the new year. The guest of the family got at eight o'clock. After that, my dad started to play music. At ten o'clock, everybody began to dance and then we ate the food at eleven o'clock. It's fun. Finally about three o'clock, everybody went home.

    This encounter was wonderful due to that share whit my family it was a gread evening and everybody was enjoyed this party.

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    1. I met my family to receive the new year at my parent's house.

      with my family
      It was a great evening
      everybody enjoyed this party

      Good job, you had simple mistakes, correct them
      Score: 4,5

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  16. We will never forget, the started of this New year, when us got together for got this new year covered of happiness and good new.
    Fist, we went to shopping the dinner for made between we, it was delicious stuffed turkey and drink were natural juices.

    After of thisw could got tigether at twelve o¨clockof the night with ours family for enjoyed of the food and music.

    There wewre about thirthy people in the celebration, its half past twelve celebrate the happy year and see fireworks
    finally that night it was one of the best nigts of ours lifes.

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    1. The beginning of this year
      when we got...
      good news
      First we went to buy the staff to prepare the dinner by ourselves
      The drinks were natural juices
      After that
      Organize your ideas as this is difficult to understand
      Score: 3,7

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