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  1. Ana Maria Alvarado - Giuliana Lopera.
    Sandsurfing:
    -What is Sandsurfing?
    is a extreme sport in which people surf on sandunes
    -How long has it been a sport?
    this sport started in March-2006. Joey Manalies, who invented this.
    -Is it similar to any other sport?
    yes, this sport is similar to waterskiing, the difference is the place you do it.
    -What equipment do i need?
    you need a yet ski and protection for your body.
    -what are the best places for sandsurfing?
    you must do it on deserts where there is an abundance of sandunes which you can have unlimited riding.
    -where can i find out more?
    in some regional tournaments. :) <3

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  2. Name:Cristian Mesa,Juan Herrera
    Coasteering
    -what is coasteering?
    Coasteering is a adventure sport which is do it along a rocky coastline.
    -How long has it been a sport?
    people have to walk, go around mountains and caves, dive.
    -is it similar to any other sport?
    it is similar to psibloc such as you climb walls over water and the difference is that in coasteering you explore caves.
    -what equipment do i need?
    Wetsuit.
    Buoyancy Aid.
    Helmet.
    Wetsuit Socks.
    Wetsuit Gloves.
    -what are the best places to do it?
    the best places to practice this sport are on mountains, caves, coastlines, etc.
    -Where can i find out more
    Check out online communities for Coasteering events.

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  3. Names: Mariana Rico 32

    Juliana Diaz 10

    Sand surfing

    Sand surfing is not considering a “real sport” because it does not have all of the traditional elements that other kinds but for the people that practice, it does not matter. Sand surfing is a sport that mix the surf but in sand, this sport is usually practiced in large, steep coastal dunes and deserts that is commonly find this kind of material.

    The origin of this sport has a born since 19th/20th century, the inventor is:

    Egypt: according to old myths the Pharaoh's of this place likes to go down in dunes with a piece of wood, for this reason the people think that it could be the place that this sport has born.

    Some aspects that you must to care about if you want to practice this sport are:

    this kind of sport needs and special board which could be difficult to find.

    The people who practice this sport can destroy the fragile environment.

    The best place where you can practice is the natural places that the human it does not already touch.

    In my opinion the sand surfing is an original and strange sport for the people but it could be interesting and funny to do also it could have a lot of risks with the nature, I think that the human can do some to resolve that problem for instance a synthetic dune.







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  4. Joel Marin and Sergio alvarado

    which is the origin of sandsurfing?
    the origin of sandsurfing is in Brazil, most exactly in island of Santa Catarina in the dunes because the surfers does not practices the surf when it have not been waves.

    what is sandsurfing?
    this Sport was never considerate "oficial Sport". in that Sport is necessary the Special conditions because you descent of dunes and hill of sand.

    what equipment do i need?
    the equipment of this Sport are there
    recommendabe(-helmet-kneepad-elbow pacht)
    - Special board
    where are the best places to do it?
    for Example the best palces it do are:
    -Peru(the dune of 920 meters)
    -chile(hill of dragon)
    -Brazil(florianapolis)
    -nicaragua(hill of black)
    and the best clubs(subjetcive)to practices are:
    -cairo club
    -sandsnow club peruano
    where can I find the information?
    information of this club:
    -http://sandboardperu.com/club-sandboarding-snowboarding/

    -https://www.tripadvisor.co/Attraction_Review-g294201-d8610491-Reviews-Sandboarding_Cairo_Club-Cairo_Cairo_Governorate.html

    how to do it?
    in this Sport you do descent of dunes and you Experiment Extrem
    sensations because your body produce adrenaline now that is a Extrem
    Sport. you need the Special board for practices that Sports

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  5. SandSurfing by Sofía Guerra and Carlos Arias

    What's SandSurfing?
    Sandboarding is a boardsport or extreme sport similar to snowboarding riding across or down a sand dune while standing on a board. The SandSurfing is a type of extreme sport which produce adrenaline.

    What's the origin of Sandsurfing?
    Origins of Sandsurfing.
    Here are some popular claims to the "real" inventors and birthplaces of sandboarding.
    Egypt-
    According to popular myth, the sport is said to have originated in Ancient Egypt where the kings of Egypt (Pharaoh's for the historians) were to slide down the sand dunes on thin pieces of wood the claim to Egypt could be considered the real claim a little more as there are ancient hieroglyphics depicting people going down sand dunes on these pieces of wood or hardened clay.

    What are the best courses of this sport? http://www.barefootsurf.com/sandboarding.html :) Please, read the information.

    Where are the best places to do Sandsurfing?
    The best places to practice Sandsufring are Sandboarding in Israel, Australia, Peru, Chile, United States and Africa. The desert of Israel is the place where athletes and competitors practise this sport.

    How to do it?
    The first thing you need to do is find the right dune. If you're still learning the first steps, make sure you pick a dune with a gentle slope that is not too steep or long. It can be hard to land on sand, so remember that you're not riding on water. Sand dunes can be tougher than snow.

    What is the equipment?
    The equipment that you must to use is:
    1)Hat or Cap
    2)Sunscreen
    3)Sandboard (This is a special board that you use in this type of sport)
    4)Helmet
    5)Sandboard boots
    6)Sandboard Bindings

    Thank you.


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    2. SandSurfing by Sofía Guerra and Carlos Arias 2.0

      What's SandSurfing?
      Sandboarding is a boardsport or extreme sport similar to snowboarding riding across or down a sand dune while standing on a board. The SandSurfing is a type of extreme sport which produce adrenaline.

      What's the origin of Sandsurfing?
      Origins of Sandsurfing.
      Here are some popular claims to the "real" inventors and birthplaces of sandboarding.
      Egypt-
      According to popular myth, the sport is said to have originated in Ancient Egypt where the kings of Egypt (Pharaoh's for the historians) were to slide down the sand dunes on thin pieces of wood the claim to Egypt could be considered the real claim a little more as there are ancient hieroglyphics depicting people going down sand dunes on these pieces of wood or hardened clay.

      What are the best courses of this sport? http://www.barefootsurf.com/sandboarding.html :) Please, read the information.

      Where are the best places to do Sandsurfing?
      The best places to practice Sandsufring are Sandboarding in Israel, Australia, Peru, Chile, United States and Africa. The desert of Israel is the place where athletes and competitors practise this sport.

      How to do it?
      The first thing you need to do is to find the right dune. If you're still learning the first steps, make sure you pick a dune with a gentle slope that is not too steep or long. It can be hard to land on sand, so remember that you're not riding on water. Sand dunes can be tougher than snow.

      What is the equipment?
      The equipment that you must to use is:
      1)Hat or Cap
      2)Sunscreen
      3)Sandboard (This is a special board that you use in this type of sport)
      4)Helmet
      5)Sandboard boots
      6)Sandboard Bindings

      Thank you.

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  6. Names: Sofia Garzon Infante, Danna Gaitan Sanchez Grade:901

    ORIENTEERING SPORT

    What's orienteering sport?
    -orienteering is a sport which combines racing and discovering, and the people go in to the woods with a map and a compass to find differents challenges.

    What is the origin of that sport?
    -the sport was use by scandinavian military training where the militaries had to croos unknow lands only with a compass and a map.

    How to do it?
    -The people use a control card that is used to write the things that they 're finding with the map indications.

    What's the equipment?
    -Comfortable clothes to run and do the differents challenges, water to be fine, compass to ubicated and navigate in the correct way, map and control card to record your way.

    What're the courses?
    -White: Beginner level
    -Yellow: Intermediate beginner level
    -Orange: Intermediate level
    -Green and brown: short course of advanced level
    -Red: Longer course of advanced level

    Where do you can do it?
    -You can do it in Cumbria, London, High Weald, taking in to account that there are wonderful places to do differents challenges.

    Clubs and information of orienteering
    -On the International orienteering federation you can find a lot of information to inscribe in a competition. The International Orienteering Federation contains 67 differents countries.







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  7. Lina Medina,Evelin Algecira,Nadia Kaligare

    What is the origins?

    The beginnings of the Sandsurfing are diverse but in Brasil on the island of Santa Catalina surfers who could not practice their sport in the days when there were no waves.

    How to do it ?

    The Sandsurfing is a sport that consist on slinding throught tha dunes or tyhe hills of sand on a special table

    Equipment

    For this sport, we need a table with a formical base and the paraffin wax for more suport,also we need a special boats and light clothes

    Best places to do it

    *Duna Grande,Peru (920m)
    *Cerro Negro (volcano),Nicaragua (726m)
    *Cerro Dragon,Chile (220m)
    *Florinapolis,Brasil
    *Desierto Victoriano,Australia
    *Valizas,Uruguay

    Courses

    Sessions are two hours duration and include board and safety equipment.

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  8. COASTEERING

    WHAT IS COOSTERING?

    Is a physical activity in a rock which is very dangerous because if you fall in a rock and not in the water you can hurt your body.

    ORIGIN

    Born in 1770 in the island of Maui's who create this sport is King Kahekili as refered "the birdman" that jump in the water

    COURSES

    In the courses you can learn provides the safety and rescues aspects of guiding and the risk to controle this

    BEST PLACE TO DO IT

    Some places to do it are

    + Abereiddy
    +Greve de lecq
    +St noni bay
    + Hoy Island

    Equipment

    you must use a wetsuit,helmet,bouyancy aid,wetsuit gloves

    thank u

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  9. carol Rodriguez and Luisa Tafur

    Sandsurfing

    1.What is sandsurfing ?
    This sport is a blend betwen skateboarding and surfing , in which you should down or across a dune
    this sport was never considered an official sport

    2.What do you need?
    this sport requires a specially board ,gloves , googles , a helmet and elbow pads

    3.Where do you practice ?
    the best place to practice ,is regions where not harmed and isn´t a fragile dune because the sand movemet dynamics

    4 how long has it been a sport?
    this sport expanded in the 1970 , for Gary Fluitt and Jack Smith , this take a technology from snowboarding and templates

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  10. Andres Murillo, Daniel Pineda 901

    Coasteering

    1. What is Coasteering?
    RTA= Consists of crossing the intertidal zone of a rocky coast on foot or by swimming


    2. Where was created?
    RTA= In 1990, it emerged is a activity initially on the cliff coast Pembrokeshire in Gales

    3. What is the equipment?
    RTA= They used wetsuit, buoyancy aid, helmet, wetsuit socks, wetsit hood and ols shorts

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  11. names: alex santiago,samay ramirez,thomas castillo
    date:30 april 2019
    grade:901

    Sandboarding:a boardingsport and extreme sport which is similar snowboarding
    that involves riding across and down a sand dune while standing on a board,
    either with both feet strappe in or while standing loose.
    Sandboarding can also be practised sitting down or lying on the belly or the
    back. It typically involves a sandboard, although it is also possible to use
    sleds, surfboards, a skateboard deck, or snowboards.

    origins:There are claims of ancient Egyptians sliding down the dunes on wooden
    sleds and chineses persons how practice 2,000 years ago where sliding down the dunes in a
    similar fashion around 800 AD. Unfortunately, there is no hard evidence for
    these claims so it is basically legend only. Perhaps an ancient sandboard
    will be uncovered in an archeological dig and we will finally know the if
    there is an ancient inventors. Most likely the sport has come to be in the
    last century.

    Sandboarding Lessons:Sandboarding is a great sport utilising a lot of the skills and thrills of
    Surfing, Snowboarding and Skateboarding. Originated by the ancient Chinese
    using leather, wood and terracotta boards, the sport has really only become
    popular again in the last 20 years. We have probably been the leading
    exponents in the UK,

    200 dollars by person.

    best places to do it:
    1.huacachina,peru
    2.Point Mugu Sand Dunes, Calif.
    3. Negev Desert, Israel
    4. Viña del Mar, Chile
    5. Swakopmund, Namibia
    6. Great Sand Dunes National Park, Colo.
    7. The Maldives
    8. Cerro Negro, Nicaragua


    how to do it:The main thing that we should value is the table.
    If we get used to snowboarding, we can not take the table we use for it.
    And is that the proper board of sandboarding requires a formica base.
    Although not forgetting the wax and paraffin in each descent to get a
    perfect glide. Usually, the boards are made of wood and fiberglass,
    pressed with epoxy resin and with melamine phenol finishes.On the other
    hand, for the sandboard we must also use boots that are fixed correctly to
    the board. They have to be rigid, especial in the area of ​​the ankles, so
    that we avoid injuries.In addition,it is advisable to wear light cloth,
    light colors and comfortable forhouse in those areas of dunes it is very hot.
    It would also be wise to carry a bottle of water or some type of rehydrating
    drink to protect us from dehydration.

    equipment:
    1) The board
    2) The bindings

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  12. name=Luilly Perea Vivas
    grade=901

    coasteering:
    what is?Is a outdoor adventure activity that consits in a combination of sea swimming, low level climbing and traversing.
    what are the origins from croasteering? Your origins start whit the first mention in this sporting modality dates back to 1973 in the book The Cliff of the Sea, The Climbing and then was popularized in the 1990s on the coast of Pembrokeshire, Wales.

    there is courses for this deport?Ther courses Our Coasteering guide training courses are led by J-P Eatock, founding member and Vice Chair of the National Coasteering Charter. He trains and technically advises a number of Coasteering providers around the UK and the rest of the world.

    What are the best places to do it for this deport?
    2)Kaş-Turquía
    3)Mallorca-Islas Baleares
    4)Wild Atlantic Way-Irlanda
    5)Crest-Grecia.

    what Coasteering Kit & Equipment use in this deport?
    1)wetsuit
    2)buoyancy aid
    3)helment

    name=Luilly Perea Vivas
    grade=901

    coasteering:
    what is?Is a outdoor adventure activity that consits in a combination of sea swimming, low level climbing and traversing.
    what are the origins from croasteering? Your origins start whit the first mention in this sporting modality dates back to 1973 in the book The Cliff of the Sea, The Climbing and then was popularized in the 1990s on the coast of Pembrokeshire, Wales.

    there is courses for this deport?Ther courses Our Coasteering guide training courses are led by J-P Eatock, founding member and Vice Chair of the National Coasteering Charter. He trains and technically advises a number of Coasteering providers around the UK and the rest of the world.

    What are the best places to do it for this deport?
    2)Kaş-Turquía
    3)Mallorca-Islas Baleares
    4)Wild Atlantic Way-Irlanda
    5)Crest-Grecia.

    what Coasteering Kit & Equipment use in this deport?
    1)wetsuit
    2)buoyancy aid
    3)helment
    My opinion=
    the croasteering is a sport extrem with a diferents activitys as the sea swimming and the climbing.

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  13. I'm going to talk about coasteering.....

    WHAT IS COASTEERING?
    1.Coasteering is an adventure sport which is about make a coastal travel conbine with trekking, jump to the sea, explorating caves, diving and more activitys.

    HOW LONG HAS IT..?
    2.This started in 1973 print in the Üthe book Sea Cliff Climbing and in 1990 was populated in Pembrokeshire.

    IS IT SIMILAR TO OTHER SPORT..?
    3.Coasteering is so beatifull to make in vacations or in a weekend because is similar to trekking.

    WHAT EQUIPMENT DO YOU NEED..?
    4.Equipement of diving, climbing boots,helmet, vest and your presence.

    WHAT ARE THE BEST PLACE TO DO THIS SPORT..'
    5.The best place is Abereiddy Bay, Pembrokeshire where my's uncle mother traveled.

    WHERE CAN YOU FIND OUT MORE..?
    6.There are so much online groups where talk about their experiences in this activities.

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  14. Name: Cristian Lucero, Felipe Baracaldo.
    grade: 901
    COASTEERING
    When we hear this word, we can releat to a extreme sport or an adventure about a road of the climb with a rappel on the ropes.
    According to the internet definition, it is a adventure sport, doing a road to the water, jumping of a mountain and having two ropes and one rappel.
    This sport started was polarized in Gales in 1990, the people say that this sport was created to its practice in holiday to explore the cliff and the current of the water. Maybe the metereologic conditions fail in ocations, as a consequence, the sport can't be practiced.
    In other places, the sport is carry throught with courses in the climb, the exploration is done after. The people wear a bulletproff vest to protect for a blow.
    This sport has different clubs firstly in Gales and the coast of the countries.
    In our opinion this sport is amazing to do and incredible to explore. This can do with friends and relatives.

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  15. Names:
    Daniela Gutierrez
    Madelane Ortiz

    COASTEERING
    1)What is coasteering?
    It´s a sport which combined the rock climbing and the swimming in the sea

    2) where do you parctice this sport?
    you can do this activity that involves traversing the intertidal zone, that places exist in hawaii or in north devon

    3)When started the coasteering?
    The Coasteering started in the 1970, by surfers in wales who connect extreme sports as swim sea and other activities


    4)what do you need for practice this sport?
    for the previous reason you need a aquatic costume, helmet and life jacket so you protect yourself.

    5) how you practiced the coastering?
    climb the end of mountain after you fall down to the sea and swim in that place

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  16. Karol Valbuena - 37
    Mariana Perez - 29
    901
    Coasteering
    1. What is Coasteering?
    A: Coasteering is an adventure sport that consist of a coastal journey in which you can practise other sports like scuba diving, swimming, climb, hiking and rappel.

    2. Which are the best places to practise coasteering?
    A: The best places to practise coasteering are:
    - Kaş, Turkey
    - Mallorca, Balearic Islands
    - Wild Atlantic Way, Ireland
    - Crest, Greece
    - Natural Park of Arrabida, Portugal

    3. Which are some of the most important clubs for do coasteering?
    A:
    - Coasteering Cliff Jumping in Mallorca
    - The Coasteering Club
    - Coasteering Peambrokeshire – Milford Marina

    4. Which is the coasteering equipment?
    A:

    You need to bring
    Old trainers with some tread that you don't mind getting wet
    Swimming costume
    Thin base layer
    Warm clothes to change into after the session
    Old shorts with drawstring to go over the wetsuit
    Towel
    Plastic bag for all of your wet kit
    Waterproof Camera (optional)
    We will provide
    5mm wetsuit
    Helmet
    Buoyancy aid
    Safety equipment
    Hot drinks
    During the winter months groups will be issued with rash vest and
    Neoprene gloves, socks and balaclavas
     

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  18. Names: Andres Amaya
    Jaime Estupiñan

    Grade:901
    SandSurfing
    1)What is sandsurfing birth?
    Your birth is in Egypt, acording to a popular myth this sport born in the Ancient Egypt where the kings slide down to the sand dunes on pieces of wood or hardened clay , others popular myths claim the birth of this sport in the Arabian Peninsula.

    2) But where i can practised?
    OK my friend, Dont worry exist a lot of places to realise this sport
    for example :
    The desert of Swakopmund, Namibia
    The Safra and Hudadah Dunes, Egypt
    The Great Sand Sea, Egypt
    The Atlantis Dunes, Souht Africa

    3) Ok but, how i can realise this unusual sport?
    Its so easy you only need follow this steps
    1-Climb up a sand dune
    2-Check your equipement and remember to have a good protection
    3-Perform small jumps and put the table down of you
    4-Have fun while you fall
    5-Repeat all the steps again

    4) And what i need to equipement?
    This are a good question , the only wiht you need is a good table and much protection.

    5) Well but, where i can found more information about sandsurfing?
    You can find more complete informacion in
    Cairo club sandboarding , and in Desert rangers in the Dubai city


    thanks for watching


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  19. Name: Felipe Suarez Gutierrez-35
    Grade:901
    SAND SURFING

    what is SandSurfing?

    SandSurfing is considered a xtreme sport , this sport its very similar to snowboarding just that the principal difference is that
    the snowboard usually is practiced on a big snown mountain while the
    sandboarding usually is practiced in a desert with a kind of short sand mountain, sandsurfing is considered like a mix into the skate barding and surf.

    Origin:
    the humanity has created a lot of theories about of his origin place and how the sandsurfing was created, in the below part are some posibilityes to answer this question.

    One of the most known theories arrive in the acient egypt.

    Egypt: When the different hystorian people saw on the diferent hieroglyphics people that slide down of a sand dune with a piece of wood how a table.


    Santa Catarina, Brazil: When the surfers found that were some low waves,they decided change surf in the waver for surf in a sand dunes.

    Some recomendations:

    -Pay attention to the differents instructions that the guide give you.

    -Use the basical equipement.

    -Don't separe of your group.

    -You have to pay attention to the weather.

    -you have to be preparated to the most exiting experience of all your life.

    -Enjoy the experience. :)

    Equipment:
    ok,if you want do this sport you will have to follow the next information.
    if you are beginner please pay attention
    the equipment:

    -
    -Wetsuit,
    -Helmet,
    -Bouyancy aid,
    -Wetsuit gloves

    Where can i do this kind of sport?

    Hi,if you want to do this kind of sports i'm going to recommend you the follow places.

    -Atlantis Dunes
    -Ica, Peru.
    -Swakopmund, Namibia.
    -Kangaroo Island, Australia.
    -Great Sand Sea, Egypt

    How you can do this sport?

    -Find a sand dune
    -Put you in the highgest point
    -Put all the necesary equipment
    -Put you sand board under your feet
    -Slide down the dune
    -Enjoy the experience

    thanks..

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  20. Name Daniel Andres Bernal Ojeda
    grade 901
    11 06 2019
    COASTERRING

    The coasteering its a activity of exploring,
    jumping and swimming.

    the best places for practicing coasteering are
    the turkeys coast, mallorca, Greece, Portugal and UR.

    the are training course. Hs very important the safety kit, so the price its U$ 150 for person.

    Into safety ists important the group management, water rescue skills.

    There are some clubes, by example: cabra loca in spain, scarborough surf school in U.R. and coasteering edinburgh in Scottan.

    the safety kit:Wet suit, helmet, buoyancy aid, wesuit gloves,socks and hoods.
    these activity became in gales U.R.

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